Response to Peer Feedback (news 2)

1.‘‘107 is an uncompromising cinema continuously providing a place for art movies addicts; meanwhile, endeavoring to bring more people unfamiliar with art movies inside.’’ 

    One of our group member suggested that using attract or draw would be better.

→ Actually, I prefer to use bring given that I want to emphasize the action of people who are unfamiliar with art movies entering 107 cinema from his or her previous position, a distinction between mainstream and art movies.

2.‘‘107 is an uncompromising cinema continuously providing a place for art movies addicts; meanwhile, endeavoring to bring more people unfamiliar with art movies inside.’’ 

The grammar of this sentence is not correct. It needs comma or to add ‘‘which’’.

→ I agree with this advice. I will add ‘‘which’’.

3.In the first paragraph, I don’t have to tell readers about people watching movies online nowadays.

I can just say art movie theaters are more difficult than commercial ones for running.

→ I agree and I should try my best to make my news conciser. Because my point is introducing 107 art cinema so I don’t need to talk about people watching movies online nowadays.